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TOEFL Writing practice #14

Task 1: Integrated Writing

Reading Passage:

The history of space exploration dates back to the mid-20th century when the United States and the Soviet Union competed to be the first to launch satellites, animals, and humans into space. The first human to walk on the moon was Neil Armstrong in 1969. Since then, numerous space probes have been launched to explore our solar system, and the International Space Station (ISS) has been continuously occupied since 2000.

Despite these achievements, space exploration is not without its controversies. Some people argue that the vast sums of money spent on space exploration could be better used to solve problems on Earth, such as poverty, disease, and climate change. Others believe that space exploration is essential to the survival of the human race, as it could help us find new sources of energy, minerals, and even habitable planets.

Looking to the future, space exploration is likely to become increasingly important. Private companies, such as SpaceX and Blue Origin, are investing heavily in space tourism and commercial spaceflight. NASA and other space agencies are also planning missions to Mars and beyond. With the development of new technologies and the increasing interest of private companies, it's clear that space exploration will continue to be a major focus of human endeavor.

Listening Passage:

Professor: Hello class, today we're going to talk about the history and future of space exploration. As you've just read, space exploration has been a source of controversy for many years. While some argue that it's essential to our survival, others believe that the money spent on it could be better used to solve problems on Earth.
However, I think it's important to look at the bigger picture. Space exploration has led to numerous technological advancements that have had benefits on Earth, such as GPS technology and weather forecasting. Furthermore, space exploration has inspired countless young people to pursue careers in science and engineering.
Looking to the future, I believe that space exploration will continue to be essential. As we face challenges such as climate change and overpopulation, we need to look for new solutions beyond our planet. In addition, private companies such as SpaceX and Blue Origin are driving innovation in space technology and making it more accessible to the public. I think that the future of space exploration is bright, and we should continue to invest in it.

The question:

Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points made in the reading passage.

My Answer:

The reading passage write about general view regarding history and future of space exploration. It mention the controversies, some people argue the vast amount of money on space industry should be spent on earth own problems such as poverty, disease, and climate change. On the other side, some people believe space exploration is important for human sustainability, by this initiative we could find new sources of energy, minerals, and even habitable planets.

In the lecture, the professor emphasizes the controversies and provides new perspective. She said, we must look at the bigger picture of this issue. According to the professor, space exploration not only about the space, but also about how it has stimulate human technology to become more sophisticated, such as our GPS systems and weather forecasting. Moreover, she explains that this space industry is a place for huge numbers of employees, that offers good careers in science and technology. 

The professor concludes that space exploration is essential for human future sustainability. Furthermore she believe, right now the environment of space industry become more reliable since there are private company came in. At the end, she emphasize her opinion that space exploration must continue to brights.

ChatGPT Asessment:

Score: 23/30

Your answer does a good job of summarizing the main points from both the reading passage and the listening passage, and it is clear that you understand the differing opinions on the topic of space exploration. Your writing is generally well-structured and easy to follow. However, there are a few areas where improvements could be made.

Grammar and Vocabulary: There are some instances of incorrect grammar and word usage, such as "The reading passage write about general view" which should be "The reading passage discusses the general view." Make sure to proofread your writing to correct any grammatical errors and improve the clarity of your sentences.

Addressing the question: The question asks you to explain how the points made in the lecture cast doubt on specific points made in the reading passage. While you have summarized the lecture's points well, you could improve by more explicitly connecting the points from the lecture to the points in the reading passage and showing how they counter or cast doubt on those points.

Cohesion and coherence: While your writing is generally clear and easy to follow, there are a few instances where the connection between sentences and ideas could be improved. For example, when discussing the professor's conclusion, consider using a transition word or phrase to better connect your ideas and create a smoother flow in your writing.

Overall, your answer demonstrates a solid understanding of the topic and the two passages. By addressing the points above, you can further improve the clarity and persuasiveness of your writing.


Task 2: Indenpendent Writing

The question:

Some people believe that college education should be free, while others argue that students should pay for their education. What is your opinion?

My Answer:

In my perspective, I would say that colleges or universities must be not free, they must collect fee from their students. Here are my reasons.

First of all, the fact that to operate college or university it cost large amount of money. It has to be a place, classrooms, the professors, the administrators, and many other facilities that essentials to support educational process going well. To provide those kind of things, obviously colleges need money, can't be not. Then where the money come from? It is possible government support all the cost, some countries do. But in general, impossible all government can provide all the cost completely. So colleges and universities have to charge fee to their students, in order to, once again providing good educational process to their students.

Secondly, in students point of view. It is good to pay fee for their education, it is like an investment. The people who want to preaching brighter future, they must sacrificing something, whether their time, energy, and of course their money. By seeing the education cost as an investment, the students pushed to think the way how to get their money back, so they must put more effort seriously to their study. This scheme could make the output of college in high quality person who ready to work or doing their own business.

In conclusion, I believe education for college students must have a price in order to preaching brighter future for students. However, I don't mean scholarships or sponsorship must be cancel at all. Because in reality, not everyone can afford the price of university, scholarship must help some students that can't afford the fees but have big potential as a person.

ChatGPT Asessment:

Your answer is generally well-structured and addresses the question effectively. However, there are some grammar and vocabulary mistakes that need to be corrected. I would rate your answer a 20 out of 30. Below, I have provided a revised version of your response with corrections and suggestions for improvement:

In my perspective, I would say that colleges or universities should not be free, and they must collect fees from their students. Here are my reasons.

First of all, operating a college or university costs a significant amount of money. To support the educational process, institutions must have physical spaces, classrooms, professors, administrators, and many other essential facilities. Providing these resources requires funding, which often cannot be fully covered by government support. Therefore, colleges and universities must charge fees to their students in order to provide a quality education.

Secondly, from the students' point of view, paying for their education can be seen as an investment. To achieve a brighter future, individuals must sacrifice their time, energy, and money. Viewing education costs as an investment encourages students to put more effort into their studies, as they will be motivated to recoup their investment. This mindset could result in graduates who are high-quality professionals, ready to work or start their own businesses.

In conclusion, I believe that college education should have a price to ensure a brighter future for students. However, this does not mean scholarships or sponsorships should be canceled altogether. In reality, not everyone can afford the cost of higher education, so scholarships should be available to help students with great potential who cannot afford the fees.


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